SusieDefinitely intriguing. it makes the reader want more, with many questions they’ll want answered!Two edits; 1. Coming from a time of when kings – leave off the of… Just coming from a time when kings…2. Their enemies. The new mysterious allies, the wave keepers, and even themselves are all vying… (Maybe that helps the run-on)It is awesome, you are awesome… Don’t forget us when you’re a literary star! |